warrior123 Posted September 17, 2015 Share Posted September 17, 2015 This is a dark graphic story of 2 gay bodybuilders having sex and getting into a fight with a robber. Zac stats 200 pounds27 years old5 foot 7Bodybuilder Shawn stats 200 pounds29 years old5 foot 8 Bodybuilder Devil stats400 pounds19 years old6 foot 2Fat Zac and Shawn are both in Shawn's bedroom naked and having muscle gay sex on his double bed. They are rolling around on the bed muscle to muscle. Shawn decides to sit on Zac's face and does big long loud muscular fart. Zac is panting for breath after that. Then it's reversed roles, this time Zac does a muscular fart on Shawn's face. The smell of muscular farts is strong in the bedroom right now. Shawn gets on top of Zac and places Zac's penis into Shawn's muscular ass hole. Shawn then starts to bounce up and down trying to get Zac to cum. Zac is panting out of breath.Devil then enters the room and shuts the door. Zac and Shawn are both shocked and look at Devil. Zac's dick is still shoved up Shawn's ass. Devils asks "What the fuck is that smell?" Shawn replies "It's out muscular assess, why? what are you doing here?" Devil replies "I want you 2 guys to give me your wallets and anything valuable, that way nobody is going to get hurt".Zac and Shawn look at each other. Shawn says to Zac still with his cock shoved up his ass "Is this guy for real?" Shawn then turns around and says to Devil "Dude look at our bodies... we're muscular bodybuilders, we're not some skinny shit that's weak, we kick ass".Devil then says "Fine, it's your funeral". Devil then grabs Shawn's hair using his giant fist pulling him. Still with Zac's penis shoved up Shawn's ass. Eventually Devil pulls him harder by the hair which causes Zac's penis to slide out of Shawn's ass. Shawn is till on the bed with his hair being pulled by Devil. Devil then uses his other fist to punch Shawn's giant back muscles really hard. We hear thud thud thud sounds. It's not enough to keep Shawn down because his muscular back is like a shield. He then punches his back again another 3 times even harder. Shawn then goes weak. Zac then notices that Shawn's back has gone dark red. Devil then pulls Shawn's hair harder and Shawn falls off the bed.Zac then moves forward and uses his muscular veiny feet to smack Devil in the face with. Devil sets his attention on Zac Zac tries another muscular feet wack at Devil but Devil grabs his veiny feet. He then grabs Zac's other veiny feet with his other hand and pushes Zac's legs into Zac so his knees are touching his pecs. Both veiny feet are being rubbed into Devil's face. Devil looks disgusted by the muscular stink from his veiny feet. Devil then spreads both of Zac's legs and moves forward into Zac. Zac starts to panic realising that this teenager weighs a lot and Zac himself is now struggling to move. Devil immediately grabs Zac's hair and starts pulling this goes on for about 30 seconds. Zac starts to scream "SSHAWWNNN!!!!!!!". Shawn then gets back on his feet and grabs Devil in a headlock very tight. Devil is struggling to get out stuck in that muscular armour of Shawn's muscles. Shawn gets Devil off the bed still got Devil in a headlock. Devil's head is stuck in one side of Shawn's pecs while in a headlock. We can see that there is a huge height difference between the two. Shawn then says "Zac do it now". Zac on his knees on Shawn's bed opens up his own ass crack. Shawn struggling with Devil manages to shove the teenager's face into the muscular 27 years old buttcrack. We then hear Zac doing muscular farts. Shawn continues to press Devil's face into Zac's ass. Devil is suffocating. TO BE CONTINUED. What do you lot think of this so far? 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
flamedelft Posted September 18, 2015 Share Posted September 18, 2015 It seems more like a draft than a story. There should be more descriptions (what are they thinking, feeling), you should decide who's the narrator (are we following the viewpoint of one of the guys, is it all from third person...) It will not be everyone's cup of tea, but that shouldn't stop you from writing more. Feel free to either PM me, or look into the 'Writing help' forum or the group 'Muscle Growth Writers' Lair' for even more feedback 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
warrior123 Posted September 18, 2015 Author Share Posted September 18, 2015 Thank you flamedelft. I'm new to writing stories yet so I just wanted to share my thoughts of fantasies go through my head. By the way it's all from the third person. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
warrior123 Posted September 18, 2015 Author Share Posted September 18, 2015 By the way, who do you think will win the fight? Who is winning? Who suffered the most beating so far? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NewYorker Posted September 22, 2015 Share Posted September 22, 2015 By the way, who do you think will win the fight? Who is winning? Who suffered the most beating so far?Look, I appreciate the initiative to take the time and write something, but this not a story yet. It's a very quick first draft of an idea. If you want people to be invested in your story, you have to first invest In writing it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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