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liftme

Awesome love the details and of course the lifting of you with one arm.  Lol

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ileburger

That’s a pretty good start :)

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sithspawn

Good start but just a couple of tips.  Firstly, you might just want to proof read it a tiny bit more closely as there's a couple of spelling mistakes in there.  Secondly, when you say you're "110% open to change" don't let anyone tell you what they want if it doesn't fit in with your vision, and don't feel that one person's comment reflects what everyone else thinks.  It's your story at the end of the day.

It's always daunting when you start your first story because you don't know if you're doing it right, but stay true to what you want to write and you'll do ok  :) 

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dredlifter

Great job!  I'm hooked for wanting more. 

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liftme
27 minutes ago, sithspawn said:

Good start but just a couple of tips.  Firstly, you might just want to proof read it a tiny bit more closely as there's a couple of spelling mistakes in there.  Secondly, when you say you're "110% open to change" don't let anyone tell you what they want if it doesn't fit in with your vision, and don't feel that one person's comment reflects what everyone else thinks.  It's your story at the end of the day.

It's always daunting when you start your first story because you don't know if you're doing it right, but stay true to what you want to write and you'll do ok :) 

So true love it.  I've written some stories and I got away from posting because of a few derogatory comments.  I need to start writing again.

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Jtchef2

Great start to your story!!! I can't wait to read more chapters 💪🏻💪🏻💪🏻

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OldFashioned

Oh god, this hits all my buttons! Can’t wait for more!!

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Blabbages

Incredibly sexy. Always looking for more stories of all-powerful muscle gods. Can’t wait to see how the story continues!

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asianman2410

Definitely hooked. I love the whole chapter how it's like an introduction. Great descriptions. Looking forward to more. 

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