Guest Posted June 22, 2014 Share Posted June 22, 2014 I really enjoyed this. The perspective was great, the switch of tense was perfect, the tension built up nicely and the unexpected switch at the end was awesome.Thanks MonsterMash... It is an honor actually having you comment on my work (and liking it too!). I have loved everything you have done since your very first story, Double Wish, so I really appreciate this a lot! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MonsterMash62 Posted June 22, 2014 Share Posted June 22, 2014 Shucks! Now that was quite the compliment! Thanks for that, and again for the awesome story Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted June 23, 2014 Share Posted June 23, 2014 Well written story. I really enjoyed it! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aronymous Posted June 23, 2014 Share Posted June 23, 2014 "and we both agreed that one of us was definitely going to be captain and the only way for our rivalry to stop was to end this charade for good by draining the other one completely." Lol really? Apart from that, good story. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xboy Posted July 15, 2014 Share Posted July 15, 2014 no new part or continue? 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted July 16, 2014 Share Posted July 16, 2014 no new part or continue? Was meant to be a one time story. Currently writing A Muscle Dad Built to Order. When I finish I MAY revisit this... from the other perspective. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tomoshiraga Posted July 16, 2014 Share Posted July 16, 2014 That'd be amazing. From the looks of it the crowd is about to burst in their pants and out of the seats. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinytank90 Posted July 29, 2014 Share Posted July 29, 2014 I love this stories can't wait to see wait to read your next one. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
astro Posted January 26, 2016 Share Posted January 26, 2016 queremos segunda parte. vamos hombre que se puede crear algo excelente Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted January 26, 2016 Share Posted January 26, 2016 I liked both the arm wrestling and the theft. Wish I could’ve seen it happen. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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