Ozymandias Posted September 8, 2018 Share Posted September 8, 2018 Another great addition! How you describe their personalities and the chemistry reels you in. And you convey the anxiousness our protagonist feels when talking to AJ perfectly - we all know the giddy feeling of talking to someone you really like! That illustration is awesome too :) 5 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
muscleaddict Posted September 8, 2018 Author Share Posted September 8, 2018 6 hours ago, Ozymandias said: Another great addition! How you describe their personalities and the chemistry reels you in. And you convey the anxiousness our protagonist feels when talking to AJ perfectly - we all know the giddy feeling of talking to someone you really like! That illustration is awesome too Thanks for the awesome feedback, matie! These chapters where they're messaging each other and sort of building their own little world were particularly fun to write! And yes I've been there quite a few times. That excitement and buzz when you get an email/text/message from someone you like. May not resonate with everyone but hopefully some people will be able to relate to it! Agreed on the illustration too! It's fucking awesome and he is one talented dude! Fingers crossed he has time to do more but they take time and he's a busy boy. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Popular Post muscleaddict Posted September 8, 2018 Author Popular Post Share Posted September 8, 2018 Next chapter. Tell me if I'm going too fast! Nine Every day for the rest of that week I exchanged messages with AJ Jones on Facebook. Some days just a few for a short period of time, and other times lots of messages sent over a period of hours. Most of the time the messages were cheeky and funny. Jokes about me going to Scorpio’s and becoming a cocky, shredded, posing trunk sporting (fuck!) bodybuilder like AJ. Other times they were more serious. Messages about training. Advice from AJ about diet and supplements. We also sometimes reminisced about school. He even asked me about uni a few times too. On the morning of that Friday I was getting my gym stuff together and (again), felt ridiculously nervous, yet admittedly excited, about the prospect of seeing the boy I’d spent the past week exchanging cute, funny, awesome Facebook messages with. I wasn’t sure whether I could handle spending the whole gym session wondering whether I was going bump into AJ or not, so I decided to bite the bullet and sent him a message to try and find out whether he’d be at the leisure centre. “OK, I’m braving it. I’m just about to go to the gym to do (gulp!)…LEGS!” He replied straight away. “HAHA!” “God help me!” I replied. “How funny. I’m just about to head to Scorpio’s! Only it’s chest day for me. GRRRR!” I instantly started to swell at the “GRRRR!” Or maybe it was just the thought of AJ pumping up in the gym. Or just the thought of AJ full stop. I’d never met a man before with the ability to make me rock hard from a single text message. But AJ had been doing that practically every day that we’d been in contact. “Both getting our pump on! HELL YEAH!” I messaged. And then I sent the AJ emoji. “Watch out Little Denton Leisure Centre. The Buff Cookster is coming and he’s taking NO prisoners.” “Ahem. I think you mean Noah “What’s Cooking? Shredded Fucking BEEF” Cook is coming!” I replied. “Haha! Oooops. Silly me. Well have a good workout, mate!” Well that solved that then. I wouldn’t be bumping into AJ at the gym. I thought I would feel relieved, but I didn’t. In fact, I felt an almost crushing disappointment as I stared at my phone and messaged him back. “You too, mate.” I put my phone down on my bed, but it pinged straight away. AJ had sent me another message. Just one word. “Unless.” Oh my God! Three dots. The longest three dots ever. “You wanna come to Scorpio’s with me?” FUCK! My heart swelled and seemed to fill up my whole chest. Was this a genuine offer? Or were we doing the whole, jokey, “Noah The Bodybuilder” thing again? “Are you serious?” My heart was pounding. My head was spinning. “Yep.” Three more dots. “Why not?” Erm … because I’m NOT a two hundred and fifty pounds, ripped to buggery competitive bodybuilder! I’m a slim built, casual gym goer who doesn’t look like he belongs anywhere NEAR a hardcore bodybuilding gym and I’ll probably get laughed out of the fucking building the second I walk in there! “We keep joking about it. So why don’t we do it? I’ll show you what a real gym looks like. Hehe!” My stomach was twisting in knots. “Don’t I have to be a member?” I messaged. “No. They do guest passes if you go with someone whose already a member.” I wanted to go. I really, really wanted to go. But, well … FUCK! “Promise you won’t end up in Mark Green’s protein shake!” And then he sent the crying with laughter face emoji. “Hehe!” I replied “I’ll look after you.” And that’s what did it. I melted. I grinned. I took a deep breathe and typed. “OK! Let’s do it!” FUCK!! What am I doing?! “Awesome!” And then he sent the big, teeth bearing grin emoji. “You’ll get to see AJ “The Ripper” Jones pumping up in action.” Instant fucking hard on. “The Ripper??” “Oh yeah. It’s a new nickname I’m trying out. We can discuss that later.” And then he sent my favourite emoji. The AJ emoji. He gave me his phone number (I had a competitive bodybuilder’s phone number! What the fuck was going on?!) and shortly afterwards texted me his address. AJ was apparently going to drive us to Scorpio’s. I was absolutely bricking it when I approached AJ’s house. I knew it was his straight away because there was a motorbike on the drive. Apparently AJ’s mum and big, bald, built like a brick shithouse, leather wearing Andy (i.e. my first ever male crush) were still together. I felt an incredible rush of excitement. At the prospect of maybe seeing Andy for the first time in about twelve years, but mostly at seeing AJ again. My heart was pounding when AJ opened the door. He was smiling at me. That gorgeous grin, but something else was going on too. Beneath the smile, he, oddly, looked kind of nervous. His hair was as styled and preened as it was for our personal training session and he was wearing a bright red hoodie. It was the most covered up I’d ever seen him, but he still looks like an absolute tank. It wasn’t the tightest of hoodies, but I could still see his huge chest bulging underneath the material. There was a symbol of a scorpion and wording around the image embedded on the left side of the chest. It was a Scorpio’s Gym hoodie which, for some reason, I found crazily hot. A proper, little bodybuilder wearing clothes from a proper, hardcore bodybuilding gym. GRRRRR! As soon as we were both sat in the car, I got an instant hard on. Just being sat so close to AJ was an incredible turn on. My ordinary sized legs so close to his thighs, which looked ridiculously thick under his black baggie trackies, which had the word “GASP” written down them, and which I knew to be a proper bodybuilding clothing brand. Thank GOD I had my backpack in my lap to cover up my crotch. “Mate, you can put your bag in the back if you want.” FUCK! “Oh, er … that’s alright.” He looked at me and shot me one his heart melting grins. He didn’t look quite so nervous anymore. “Nervous?” he asked me. “A little!” I replied. His grin got wider. “You’ll be fine! Just watch out for hungry looking bodybuilders. And if you see Mark Green coming towards you with a knife and fork, just run!” I laughed but felt flustered at the same time. What if 6’3 muscle monster daddy Mark Green was there? FUCK! “No, seriously, mate. It’s not just bodybuilders and huge guys who go there.” “Phew!” I said. “You’ll blend right in. Especially when you’re a bodybuilder yourself!” I coyly grinned and nervously looked at him and he was flashing me a mischievous grin. I suddenly felt relaxed. With it, came a surge of bravery. “So, what’s this new nickname?” A huge grin filled his whole face. “The Ripper! AJ “The Ripper” Jones. Ripper as in, you know … fucking ripped!” My hard on stirred under my backpack. Fuck yeah! “Hmmm. Not bad,” I replied. “Kinda sounds like you fart a lot, though!” AJ howled loudly. “Well … I kinda do!” I pulled a face. “Thanks for the warning!” He giggled. One of his cute, little, laddish giggles I loved so much. “Noah, I eat two hundred grams of protein a day. Of course I fart a lot!” I think it was the first time he’d actually called me Noah since we’d bumped into each two weeks before in the meat aisle of Tesco. I suddenly felt giddy and couldn’t refrain from smirking. He asked me how my diet was going and gave me a mini lecture in how most of building muscle is down to what you eat when I told him I’d been struggling to stick to the diet plan he’d made for me during our personal training session. “I hope I don’t bore you with all this bodybuilding stuff!” AJ said. “No!” I replied, perhaps a little too eagerly. AJ grinned and I felt a little coy. I suddenly felt nervous again. “I find it really interesting!” And I swear I actually blushed. “I can tell you do! Most people don’t get it.” AJ’s reaction gave me the confidence to carry on with the subject. “I completely get it! I find it kind of incredible that you can actually do that to your body. Sort of … mould and transform it into this thing that’s … not of the norm.” “Exactly!” AJ said, excitedly grinning. My heart fluttered and my crotch twitched under my backpack. “And that final look, when you’re in competition condition,” I continued. “It just looks … amazing! Almost inhuman!” I couldn’t believe what I was saying, but it gave me such a buzz to talk openly about my feelings towards bodybuilders. Or at least, some of them. “Hell yeah!” AJ replied, grinning wildly. “That’s what it’s all about, mate. That competition look. Huge and shredded! Muscle bellies popping. Striations fucking everywhere!” OH MY FUCKING GOD. My dick was juddering furiously. If only AJ knew what he was doing to me. “Striations are these lines you get in your muscle when you’re super duper shredded,” AJ explained. I smiled to myself. I knew this, of course, but I decided to play dumb. AJ clearly loved teaching me about all things bodybuilding related, which I found completely adorable. Or was this just AJ trying to corrupt and lead me astray, much like he did when we were younger? “Oh, right!” I replied, playing dumb. “More lingo!” “I’ll show you a picture of a really shredded bodybuilder later!” Judder, judder, judder. FUUUUCCKKK! “You’ll be shocked!” Of course I will, AJ. Because I’ve NEVER seen a picture of a shredded to death muscle freak with striations in his ass and a full on, bonkers, Christmas tree shaped lower back. I had the overwhelming urge to ask AJ what it felt like to be in shredded, competition condition. To stand on stage and flex for an audience. But I didn’t quite have the nerve. Maybe those were questions for another day. If there’d even be one, of course. Scorpio’s Gym was absolutely nothing like what I was expecting from the outside. It was a brick building on a run down industrial estate. I almost wondered whether AJ had taken me somewhere else, until I saw the words “SCORPIO’S GYM” written on the side of the building, with the same image of a scorpion that was on the chest of AJ’s bright red hoodie. It was only because the building was so inconspicuous looking that I wasn’t feeling half as nervous as I expected to. As I followed AJ Jones into the gym, I felt the most amazing buzz. I really couldn’t believe what I, Noah Cook, was walking into a proper hardcore bodybuilding gym with an actual bodybuilder. But it wasn’t just that. It was also the simple act of just being with AJ. After spending so much time over the previous few days, laughing and smiling to his messages and dreamily gazing at my phone, I was now actually with him in the flesh. It was like he’d ignited a fire inside of me. The more time I spent with him. The more times he made me laugh, and blush, and smiled at me, in that cute, gorgeous way that he did, the more it felt like my insides were burning. 29 1 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ozymandias Posted September 8, 2018 Share Posted September 8, 2018 I don't think you can possibly go fast enough! Keep up the great work - have to say, I cannot wait for the moment they give into each other. Thanks for this great work 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
muscleaddict Posted September 8, 2018 Author Share Posted September 8, 2018 44 minutes ago, Ozymandias said: I don't think you can possibly go fast enough! Keep up the great work - have to say, I cannot wait for the moment they give into each other. Thanks for this great work Bless you, matie and thanks for the regular awesome feedback! Just keep reading!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
portamivia Posted September 9, 2018 Share Posted September 9, 2018 Amazing story! Love the slow pace and the excitement. Can’t wait to read it all. I’m considering waiting longer and then binge... 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
muscleaddict Posted September 9, 2018 Author Share Posted September 9, 2018 1 hour ago, portamivia said: Amazing story! Love the slow pace and the excitement. Can’t wait to read it all. I’m considering waiting longer and then binge... My biggest fear with this story is that people will think it's too slow and give up on it so I appreciate that feedback, mate! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Built22 Posted September 9, 2018 Share Posted September 9, 2018 your not going too fast and its definitely not too slow your building a story that you want to be believable thats what i love about this!!! keep the story growing mate, its truly buildingto something of epic proportions love it !!! bring on the next chapters!!!! 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
muscleaddict Posted September 9, 2018 Author Share Posted September 9, 2018 23 minutes ago, Built22 said: your not going too fast and its definitely not too slow your building a story that you want to be believable thats what i love about this!!! keep the story growing mate, its truly buildingto something of epic proportions love it !!! bring on the next chapters!!!! Bless you, matie! You've pinpointed exactly what I wanted to do and that was to write a believable and realistic story. I've tried to avoid mentioning length and structure in case it puts people off but it's definitely not a short story, as you've all probably gathered by now. I just really hope you and others stick with it and want to find out what happens between the two leads! 3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Built22 Posted September 9, 2018 Share Posted September 9, 2018 2 hours ago, muscleaddict said: Bless you, matie! You've pinpointed exactly what I wanted to do and that was to write a believable and realistic story. I've tried to avoid mentioning length and structure in case it puts people off but it's definitely not a short story, as you've all probably gathered by now. I just really hope you and others stick with it and want to find out what happens between the two leads! definitely sticking with the story!! dont just want i need to know what happens between the two leads hoping and longing them to get it on 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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