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  1. muscle16a

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    Like it so far!!!
  2. I LOVE the pacing of this story. Nice and slow, the way I like it!!!
  3. Hooray. Finally, a story to sink one's teeth into. Thank you!!!!
  4. THANK YOU, Jaypat, for these beginnings of what appears to be the best story posted on this board in, well, a number of months. I have been despairing of late as to the direction this board has been taking ... but "Troy's Maggot" is like a breath of fresh air!
  5. I'm not usually a muscle-theft fan ... but this story is SUPER-HOT!!! Thanks, JBeau
  6. As you should!! In any event, the problem is less one of "starting big" than it is POV narrative style. To understand what I mean, take a look at the sentence I highlighted: "The problem was he had a hard time putting on weight. He had always been strong, and in high school that strength allowed to him to play on the line despite being smaller than his teammates. He ate and ate, lifted five times a week and took plenty of protein shakes and pre-workout supplements to give him every edge he could think of without using steroids, but nothing seemed to work." Phrased as this is, it seems to make an objective judgment of Ryan's size. For comparison, consider something like this: "Despite his undeniable hugeness, Ryan actually believed that he had a hard time putting on weight! He knew that he had always been strong, and in high school that strength allowed to him to play on the line with confidence, despite believing himself to be smaller than his teammates (in fact, he was certainly one of the larger boys on the team). He ate and ate, lifted five times a week and took plenty of protein shakes and pre-workout supplements to give him every edge he could think of without using steroids; but no matter how much he grew, how much bigger than his peers he became, he was still convinced that he was small. Nothing, he told himself, seemed to work." See what I did there? While my revised sentences are a bit inelegant, the reader now is clear that the problem is not that Ryan is small (5'9" 250# is not small by any standard whatsoever), but that he thinks of himself as small. As Flamedelft observed, a mere issue of body dysmorphia rather than genuine smallness.
  7. I had trouble getting past chapter one. Don't get me wrong - I like the theme and like your writing style. But seriously, dude: "Ryan", the football player introduced in Chapter-1 is 5'9" tall and weighs 250 pounds (at the start), and complains that he "just can't gain any weight"! "The problem was he had a hard time putting on weight. He had always been strong, and in high school that strength allowed to him to play on the line despite being smaller than his teammates. He ate and ate, lifted five times a week and took plenty of protein shakes and pre-workout supplements to give him every edge he could think of without using steroids, but nothing seemed to work." Yeah. For me, that opening premise is so preposterous and unreal that I cannot get past it. I mean, seriously! 5'9" and 250 pounds is FUCKING HUGE and there is no other way to describe it.
  8. muscle16a

    Scrubs Part One

    I love the premise ... but I wish Thor's (and the nursing staff) grew at a slower rate!
  9. Well, in the stories posted on this site, yes - there is such a connection. But in real life, while variations in testosterone production have many effects, increased aggressiveness is not necessarily one of them. http://www.scientificamerican.com/article/strange-but-true-testosterone-alone-doesnt-cause-violence/
  10. A shame. I was really hoping that Danny would get fucked by Sam. You KNOW he wants it!!! All good top-boys do, you know; it's just a matter of finding the right guy!
  11. I like it! Nice beginning. I hesitate to even mention this, but I just cannot resist: While getting a whole guinea as a tip would be a most unusual experience for a coachman, it is a bit of an exaggeration to say that a guinea is more than he would make in a year. One Guinea is worth (in the old system) 1 pound plus 1 shilling, which is to say, 21 shillings. Even common laborers of the time could expect to make 3s. 9d per week. Coachmen made more than this. http://www.victorianweb.org/economics/wages2.html
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